Richie is a very funny and clever dog. He loves all our family and all our family loves him. He was presented to me 2 years ago when he was only 1 month old. He was so kind and shy and he had grey color. He ran from me through out all the flat because he saw me the first time in his life. He is very big for his breed and has a red color now. Richie is a really cool dog.
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By Val 16 Feb 2017#
In terms of the language, your text is accurate, and also well structured. So, you have managed to score multiplier 3 for this! Great job!
You also have a nice picture. It would have been better, however, to write some comments about it. Why are there two dogs?
The total score for this text is 643 points and you are awarded an ICAN Winner sticker!
Words: 91
Content: 91 х 3 = 273
Language: 91 х 3 = 273
Multimedia: 100
Total: 643 points
My tips:
1) Numbers 1 to 20 should be in words: two years ago.
2) The preposition you need in the below sentence is "across"
He ran from me through out across all the flat