As I’m not a hockey fan, the game itself wasn’t interesting for me, but I enjoyed staying with my friends and supporting the players. At the beginning “Miners” were leading the game, but at the end “Griffins” took the lead and won the game. From the beginning my friend and I thought that “Griffins” would win the game and they did it. It was cool, we were cheering them.
So surprisingly I enjoyed this hockey match and maybe I should go and see the adults game.
Comments (1)
By Val 18 Mar 2017#
It is concise, precise and interesting. Great job! And the pictures are appropriate too.
The language is nearly accurate even when you use difficult structures.
There is only one point I need to explain:
Unlike in Russian and Belarusian, inverted commas "______" are NOT used in English with the names of clubs, organisations, etc.
Check, for instance, this https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chelsea_F.C.
So, use "the" and Capital letters in each word of the name to show where the name begins and finishes:
For example:
The North Bay Battalion is a major junior ice hockey team.
The total score for this text is 584 points and you are awarded an ICAN Winner sticker!
Words: 121
Content: 121 х 3 = 364
Language: 121 х 1 = 121
Multimedia: 100
Total: 584 points