Yesterday I went to Zhodino. My class and I went to the factory where more than 2500 people develop and produce this big cars. This company has two Guinness world record. Factory of BELAZ is more than two hectares. We did there many interesting things. We climbed on the big ladder to the cabin. We tried to climb into a wheel. We drove a dump truck. It was not real car only simulator. It was cool! Feelings were like driving real car. I liked it! In the museum of history of this company we saw the first models of BELAZ, a lot of prizes which this company had on competitions. Also on the wall I saw two diploms of Guinness. We saw how people make this big cars, but on this part of production we couldn’t took photos. What’s a pity! But I had a lot of beautiful pictures and you can see them under this post. For lunch we had cup of tea and biscuits which looked like little cars. On the end of excursion we had a present. It was a little model of BELAZ. I like my trip very much!!!
Comments (1)
By Val 18 Nov 2017#
You have already learned how to tell interesting stories, and the photos you have uploaded are impressive.
Your language has greatly improved too. You have a few mistakes, but most of them are of the same type: word order and articles. Please, focus and try to avoid them next time:
1) word order. Start a sentence with the SUBJECT. Put adverbs of time and place at the end.
2) Check every noun for the articles.
One more thing: when you are writing is English, your text can be read by people from different countries. This is why you should explain some things. For example, it could be a good idea to say a few words about Zhodino, maybe a map link.
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