My dad and I are very like computers games. On Saturday we play FIFA 17. I always win my dad with score 2:0, but he say, that he win. On this day I sleep very well because I sleep with happy dreams. Mum usual sleep or see on this match. At one day we laugh very loud, and neighbours are came in our flat. Dad laugh loudler, then me and mum. It was the funniest day on last month. Today will be match, and I think I win my dad again and we will sleep with positive dreams (only mum and I, because today I win).
Comments (1)
By Val 1 Apr 2017#
I do believe, that you had fun. However, reading your text didn't make me smile :-(. Why? It's because you did not DESCRIBE what made you laugh so much. Do you remember how we discussed it in the Club? Name it, use adjectives, describe your feelings.
It would be a good idea if you edit your text and post it again.
Besides, the mistakes make it difficult to read. And most of the mistakes are on our Stop It list.
Please, find and correct them yourself. I have sent you a help file on Viber.
One rule here:
Remember: It is a very good song. (Very + Adjective+ Noun)
I like the song very much. (Verb "like" + Adverb "very much")
The total score for this text is 187.5 points. Sorry no ICAN Winner sticker this time. I hope your next text will be more successful.
Words: 125
Content: 125 х 1 = 125
Language: 125 х 0.5 = 62.5
Multimedia: 100
Total: 187.5 points