We were living in the apartments with the view of the sea.
On first days we went to mountains. They are located near the sea, and while walking you can see picturesque sea.
Also we were in the attraction park. I like attractions very much, but in our city we haven’t got something like in Spain. I can say that I was a little bit scared, but I’m glad that I tried something new.
Our big third tour was to aquapark. There were a slide, which is the highest in the world. Unfortunately I did’t ride it, but I hope to try it in the future. My dad had a ride on it and enjoyed it very much.
The trip to Spain was perfect. We were swimming in the sea and relax.
Comments (1)
By Val 21 Sep 2019#
It is good to know that you had such an exciting trip. Your pictures are stunning. Thanks!
Regarding the structure, it was good to see a conclusion, but remember to write an introduction too.
As for the language, please, remember:
1. We STAY in a hotel, we LIVE at home.
2. Watch the tenses. You are telling a story in the past, use Past tenses.
3. Some words should checked:
3.1. A water park or waterpark is an amusement park that features water play areas such as swimming pools, water slides, splash pads, water playgrounds, and lazy rivers. The word "attractions" can aslo be used here.
3.2. The verbs to use with "a slide" are: to go, to go down, to play on. You can find that in Online OXFORD Collocation Dictionary http://www.freecollocation.com/search?word=slide
You can come across "to ride the slide" too, like in this commercial. But do not use "on" here.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9LlDd-As0Kk
4. Mind the articles like in "went to THE mountains".
Generally, it is an interesting, easy to read text. Thanks for writing.
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