One summer, when the sun was very high, the women cold Lily was driving a car. She was very tired and really wanted to get home faster. When she came home she felled fast asleep.
In her dream, Lily appeared in a strange forest. Suddenly, she heard a strange sound in the woods. She followed the sound. A hippogrif was standing in the clearing. Lily was surprised and could not believe her eyes.
At that moment a unicorn ran in to the clearing. He really scared Lily. Lily ran out and stroked the hippogriff's back. Lily sat on his back and they flew over the forest. When they landed in the clearing, the unicorn was gone. Suddenly everything went dark and Lily woke up…
"What does that mean?" said Lily. "I saw a unicorn. Maybe it is for luck? I don’t know but let’s hope so."
Comments (2)
By Arseny Kadyshev26 Mar 2020#
By Val 4 Apr 2020#
You have written an intriguing story. Now I am also thinking what this dream could mean :-)
Have you ever had dreams like that?
Your language is good and expressive, but pay attention to words that sound the same, but mean different things and are spelt differently. Like "called" and "cold" :-)
Also, when you have to use irregular verbs, it would be a good idea to look the Past form up in the dictionary: to fall - fell- fallen.
I am also happy to see that you have learned how to use punctuation with direct speech.
All in all, it is a nice story and your score is 583 points you are awarded an ICAN Winner Sticker plus one more for being the first to upload it.
Words: 161
Content: 161 х 2 = 322
Language: 161 х 1 = 161
Multimedia: 100
Total: 583 points