I'm a couple of days late with my next text. Do you know what is it? It looks like a frog. Faithfully, there you can see my cat or his bones. The other day Gray decided to make a suicide. But he hasn’t been seriously hurt after falling from a second floor window. We had three visits to the doctor. He said that cat’s bones are not broken. Now Gray is lying in a strange manner.
Comments (1)
By Val 3 Jul 2016#
Your score:
Words: 87
Content: 87х3 = 261
Language: 87 х 1= 87
Multimedia: 100
Total: 448 points
Your strength:
You managed to capture the reader's attention by this weird X-ray picture and the hyperbolic title.
Your weakness:
There is a kind of a gap between your introduction and the story. I would suggest to add a transition/introductory sentence between the first and the second phrases.
Notwithstanding this, the text is nice and I am happy that Gray is OK.